First Draft Feedback

The feedback from our year group helps to highlight what went well in the first draft of our music video as well as what can be improved upon.
Strengths-

• Ellie's performance is excellent
• Keep the black and white
• Best video by far
• Splits mouths shot is good
• Very strong performance esp Ellie
• Dom's smiling in his own car
• Ellies performance
• Dom's pro driving

Weakness

• Why is Zahra playing a box?
• The box...why?
• Need a bit more convincing performance by Dom + Zahra
• Need to focus more on Ellie
• Zahra isn't playing drums at start
• Some shots to dark
• Black and white constant is questionable
• Focus more on Ellie
• Drunk kit is off

Overall it was clear what people thought went well which was Ellie's performing as the singer for or band. And what people thought needed to go better which was Zahra performance on a box set instead of a drum kit.

Website Evaluation

What was good- I really liked the opening page for this website as it opens with various photos of the artist, links to his social media as well as his tour dates which are all vital things fans will be searching for.

What could be better- The merchandise for the singer needs to be worked on as currently it is only filled with an out of focus image of a jumper with no price tag. Apart from that it is a very well rounded and solid website.

What was good- I thought that the inclusion of a social media sidebar was a nice touch as it allows readers to keep up to date with the artist from the get go. As well as this by including their amazing album cover really helps to sell the artist and he's record.

What could be better- There are a few blank pages such as the 'contact us page' and 'meet Cosmo' page which for obvious reasons need to be filled to make it seem like a professional website.

What was good- I liked that they took the time to conduct several separate interviews of all the band members and post it on their website, as well as this their merchandise page is well fleshed out with various different kinds of collectibles.

What could be better- The website could do with a better opening page as although the teaser for the bands video is good it is the only thing making up the opening page a link to their social media might be well placed here. As well as this the 'about me' section does not really contain a great deal of info on any of the artist.

What was good- I liked the sidebar which linked to the artists social media as well as the gallery that the website had which gave various shots of the musicians in different situations.

What could be better- The album page is quite weak on this musicians website as it only has the name of the album whereas a picture of the album would be a lot more appealing. 

What was good- I really liked the countdown towards the bands first music video I think it gives the website a great deal of originality. I also thought that the opening page was appealing showing of the bands album cover and so forth.

What could be better- Like other websites merchandise needs to be improved on as well as this a gallery is needed for fans to see their favourite artist as well as the members to advertise themselves.

What was good- I liked the image that first appears on screen which is the artist album so the reader is straight away shown who the artist is as well as the album and its availability on iTunes. I think that the gallery is also very well done not to mention the excessive back story of the artist.

What could be better- Obviously the merchandise page needs improving on but apart from that I think its a very well rounded professional website.

What was good- I think that the gallery was very good as it had many photos of the star in several locations, I think the interview with the artist was another nice touch for any fans reading.

What could be better- The front page of the website is a bit bland by putting links or displays to the artist social media would be good. Also things like merchandise need to be added to give the website a professional touch.

What was good- I liked how filled and lively the home page was with tour dates, album info, breaking news and teasers cover it which allows any fans to instantly get what they want from the website.

What could be better- Overall it is a very well done website it could use a few more photos of the star but that's about all.

First Draft (Positives & Negatives)

to improve
What to improve on-:
- the dark shots are very grainy. this needs to be fixed if the shots are long, however in quick succession we can probably get away with it
- the colour shots need to have some kind of filter on them to improve the colour: the saturation is very high
- we need more footage to be the base of the video rather than performance

What was good-
-the use of black and white is used well and highlights us as band members
-the various angles that we use are good as we use a whole range such as high, low, close up

Plan to improve these-
We will hope to improve these issues in editing by using various effects to get rid of the grainy effects. 
We will also make sure not to make these mistakes when we film on Wednesday as we have learnt from these mistakes.

Self-Evaluation

After looking at the peer evaluation from the other members of my group I have taken on board my strengths and weakness'.

1. I am not good at time management and have a tendency to show up several minutes late to a group meeting or class.
2. I need to take more initiative with ideas and input a bit more creativity into the group.
3. I do own a means of transportation and can easily take the whole of the filming team and equipment to our filming locations with relative ease.

What I have taken on board since the start of the project.

-That it is important to form a strong team and group when filming such a big sequence and be sure to share and contribute new ideas.

A major point I need to improve on.

-Have the drive to complete task quickly and effectively.

Peer Evaluation

This is our feedback from the Alleyways presentation we did together showing the progression and ideas of our band.

What our peers think went well- The groups that watched our presentation commented upon how close we all seemed as a band and how we were believable as a group. They also thought that the idea of a fun and upbeat song was a good plan for our music video task. They also believed how we had a uniqueness about our band that helped us stand out by being comprised of two girls and two boys.

What our peers thought could be better- The other groups did not have many criticisms about the style of our band but they did have concerns over the story of our music video and its direction but did like the song itself.

Peer Assessment-Jonathan

Overall Blog-Is it musical? labels clear?
Jonathan's blog is very musical and relaxing with a nice background of a forest as well as having very clear labels to read and links so that his work is easy to find.

Music Video x 3/Goodwin textual analysis
Jonathan's textual analyseis of 3 music videos using Andrew Goodwin theories is a well rounded and thorough piece of work by studying various genres from Emo to Pop as well as different artist to formulate a detailed piece of wok.

Banana phone
Jonathan's swede of the music video Banana Phone is very well crafted as he utilised some very difficult effects to create it such as the cloning tool and stop-motion effect in Adobe Premier

What Music Means to me
Jonathan's task to rediscover past music that meant something to him was well produced by clearly detailing why each song had been influential in a part of his life.

No Rest
I enjoyed Jonathan's task as it gave thought provoking ideas and express' his opinion very well and I cannot think of anything to correct.

Audience
This piece of work is very well done as it details well the way Jonathan personally consumes music.

Star Profile
Jonathan's star profile of Miley Cyrus is extremely thorough and it can be easily seen as having a lot of time invested into it and has paid out as I learnt a lot about Cyrus's extensive career.

Representation And essay

Jonathan's essay is very detailed and analyses the music video extremely well.

Any other comments
To concluded Jonathan's blog is top standard media work with up to date work which is all very well down and it appears to have no weak spots at this point in time.